I reread letters to teachers when we've had concerns in regard to our kids and I sometimes have trouble reading through favorite authors without seeing mistakes that made it through edits and into print, so you would think reading through my own writing- my own story, I would be just as apt to notice the same issues.
Not so. I've gone through my manuscript at least 5 times over the past several weeks and it wasn't until last night as I started the actual read-through that I noticed one glaring issue that jumped right off the page.
The original sentence I started out with was—
"This man's hair, silky raven in color, slicked back away from his smooth tanned forehead."
At some point the word THIS got changed into HIS (perhaps a bad backspace on my part at some point in the editing process) but I ended up with the following—
"His man's hair, silky raven in color...."
You get where I'm going, don't you?
His MAN'S HAIR? I started reading this sentence to my husband and he immediately stopped me mid-sentence and went to a bad place.
I tried to derail his train of thought- NO, it was not THAT hair! (LOL)
In the end I went with "His hair, silky raven in color, slicked back away from his smooth tanned forehead."
But needless to say, it gave my husband and I a good laugh before bedtime.
Not unlike the crazy dreams I had about Micky D's fish filets and tartar sauce last night.
Now, if only they delivered....
Back to the grindstone.
Have a fantabulous start to the week!
Write on!
Write on!
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